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Title: Haunted
Author: <lj user="walkwithheroes">
Rating: PG
Characters: Mostly River and Simon. Though Mal makes a cameo and the other’s thoughts are heard.
Summary: River’s only friends are the ghosts.
Warning: Movie spoilers.

Word count: 686

Author’s Note: All dialogue from the pilot ‘Serenity’, as well as a lot of the action.

She thought she was dead, though that did not make any logical sense. She had been alive before; she had been alive and she had been with Simon. Simon had saved her, he had brought her on a ship and had her go to sleep in a box. Maybe she died in the box and now she was a ghost? Could that be why she heard but could not see the others around her?

Let’s see what a man like him would kill for.

Kaylee could die…

Feds could be comin’.

We should have never taken passengers.

Doc ain’t goin’ near that box.

My legs are cold…

I should have never left the abbey.

That girl is important and if I don’t return with her…

River! They can’t see River.

Simon! Simon was out there, but maybe he was the one that is dead? The ghost of the old men’s sins haunted her, so why couldn’t Simon? River’s only friends for the last few years had been ghosts. For a brief moment, she thought it would be alright to have Simon and these strange new people haunt her. At least she would no longer be lonely.

“Let’s see what a man like you would kill for.” A voice, a voice that sounded awfully far away said.

Somewhere far away River heard things that she could not see. Someone-maybe the person who has been talking-kicked something and suddenly River was cold.

Huh.

Merciful Buddha.

Oh, God.

No, that poor girl.

That is one nice lookin’ nekkid girl.

River, they’ll take her away!

River quietly listened to her new ghost friends.

“I need to check her vitals.” Simon urgently told the ghosts.

“Is that what they call it?” One of the ghosts asked, a hint of disgust in his tone.

Simon tried again. “She's not supposed to wake up for another week! The shock could --”

The head ghost cut Simon off. “The shock of what? Waking up? Finding out she's been sold to some border world baron? Or, I'm sorry --was this one for you? Is it true love? 'Cause you seem -”

Deep inside River, voices told her to wake up. Wake up and tell them!

She screamed and lurched out of the box. Screaming, River spilt out of the box, crawling backward and breathing hard. Looking around her, wild-eyed, River clearly saw that these new voices were not ghosts. No, not ghosts, but men. Flesh and blood men.

Suddenly, someone was next to her and River could have sworn she heard someone say her name. A man touched her and she screamed again; men made ghosts come into her head and she didn‘t need anymore.

“River. It’s okay. It’s okay. I’m here.” River knew that voice. Simon! It was Simon and he was holding her and looking into her eyes.

Trying to focus, River felt tears welling up in her eyes. Simon was starting to cry as well, and his attention was fully focused on her. Looking around, River knew the men who were ghosts but weren’t were worried and scared and confused. The lucid part of her brain wanted to tell them she always felt the same way.

“River…”

“Simon?” Her voice sounded small and River was still unsure if Simon was a man or a ghost. Of course, if Simon was a man, that still didn’t solve anything. River’s other ghosts had surfaced again and they began talking to her. Urgently, River whispered through tears: “Simon... They talk to me, they want me to... to talk…”

Simon held her close, wanting to comfort his haunted sister. “They're gone... they're gone and we're safe now, we're safe and I'm here.”

River cried and deep inside her, the last sane part of her knew that Simon was wrong. River’s ghosts weren’t gone and they were by no means safe. Deep inside River’s mind, the ghosts that had been her only friends for three years began whispering louder. “Tell them, River. Help us get up. Tell them! Warn them, please. Make yourself a stone and tell our story.” River only response to them was to begin crying, again.

Date: 2005-11-01 02:02 am (UTC)
meinterrupted: (firefly - mal)
From: [personal profile] meinterrupted
Oh, this is so good. I can totally see this happening in River's head.

Date: 2005-11-01 02:19 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] walkwithheroes.livejournal.com
Thank you. River's head most likely has some very interesting things going on in it, so I thought I'd try to explore it.

Date: 2005-11-01 02:50 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] krypton288.livejournal.com
Wow. That's a really interesting and excellent explenation of why River was so freaked out when she got out of the box and wasn't when Simon saved her in the movie.

Date: 2005-11-01 03:02 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] walkwithheroes.livejournal.com
I was actually thinking about that as I wrote it. It might have been because River didn't "defrost" all the way, but I think this is a take that I just had to write.

Date: 2005-11-01 04:13 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] exsequar.livejournal.com
Beautiful. Diving inside River's head is always such an intense thing, and you've captured it very nicely. I especially like the use of the word "spilt" to describe how she gets out of the box, because that is the kind of movement it is - fluid and uncontrolled. I don't know, I just really liked that image. Very nice piece!

Date: 2005-11-01 04:17 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] walkwithheroes.livejournal.com
What a lovely review! I love diving inside River's head, as she is my favorite character and one of the most interesting. It may sound strange, but that whole scene is one of my favorites from 'Firefly', so I just knew I had to use it for this fic.

Thank you for the review. :)

Date: 2005-11-01 04:23 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] exsequar.livejournal.com
Definitely not strange - it's one of my favorites as well! Simon and River is my favorite relationship as well, so it makes sense :) The intensity of his love for her and his pain as he sees her in pain... gets me every single time. Her panic, confusion, fear - it just reaches out and grabs you. Amazing.

As for me, I knew I had to use it in an icon :) (Oops, used the wrong icon by accident the first time!)

Date: 2005-11-01 05:25 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] walkwithheroes.livejournal.com
Totally. I love and adore a lot of relationships from the show: Mal and Inara, Wash and Zoe, Kaylee and Inara, Kaylee and Mal, Kaylee and Wash, Simon and Kaylee, Book and River, Book and Mal, Kaylee and River, Jayne and Mal, Jayne and Wash, etc.

But, my all time favorite is River and Simon. There's just something about the relationship that really gets to people. I mean, they love each other so much, it's just so wonderful and heartbreaking. And that scene, as she enters the show-it gets me everytime. That and the 'burning at the stake' scene. Oh, I love it.

And I have that icon. :)

Date: 2005-11-01 05:26 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] walkwithheroes.livejournal.com
Ops, forgot Zoe and Mal. Love their realtionship too.

Date: 2005-11-01 05:09 am (UTC)
From: (Anonymous)
Wow.. That was one good fic! I loved the voiced and the inside thoughts of the crew. LOL at Jaynes..Great job!

Date: 2005-11-01 05:21 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] walkwithheroes.livejournal.com
Thank you very much. :) As for Jayne's thoughts...well, he can be a bit of a pervert, but isn't that why we love him?

Date: 2005-11-01 06:08 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] honorh.livejournal.com
That is one cool interpretation of River's waking words. I wonder if Joss meant it--I mean, he said he was changing his original plan for the Reavers--but I wonder if he still had it in mind for River to speak for some other ghosts. Great fic.

warning, movie spoilers

Date: 2005-11-01 06:20 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] walkwithheroes.livejournal.com
Ever since seeing the movie, I've thought that River's waking words were about the people of Miranda. And looking back at her rants, they all actually seemed to be directed not at Simon, but at her doctors. "Son of a bitch, dressed me up like a gorram doll." That seems to be from when her doctor showed her to the Alliance. Of course, when the show was airing and before the movie, I thought River's waking words were about her doctors wanting to test her telepathic abilities.

I think Joss had it in mind that River would know a lot of government secrets and that she'd be the voice of the Alliance's past victims.

Oh, and thanks for the review.

Re: warning, movie spoilers

Date: 2005-11-01 11:52 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] neuralclone.livejournal.com
"You can't dress me up like a doll and stick needles in my eyes and ask me what I see" - yes, in retrospect it all makes sense.

Re: warning, movie spoilers

Date: 2005-11-01 02:23 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] walkwithheroes.livejournal.com
Doesn't it? And her rant in 'Shingdig' about being taken, makes me think they first brought her to the lab after she brushed her teeth. Like, instead of going to a class, they had her do other things that day.

Date: 2005-11-01 06:40 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] ladylauraglyde.livejournal.com
An interesting take. Good job.

Date: 2005-11-01 02:19 pm (UTC)

Date: 2005-11-01 08:06 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] sappho-wilde.livejournal.com
This is terrifying, but it could very well have been what was going through her mind. I love her confusion between ghosts and reality. The lines are always so blurred with River, like a watercolor in the rain. Beautiful ficlet!

Date: 2005-11-01 02:21 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] walkwithheroes.livejournal.com
Thank you! I love River's blurred state of being, it's so sad and yet beautiful and it's wonderful to write.

Date: 2005-11-01 04:47 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] the-patritian.livejournal.com
*jawdrop* Am way too in love with fic to be coherent, but, SQUEEE and jubilation.

Date: 2005-11-01 08:25 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] walkwithheroes.livejournal.com
Aw, thanks. :)

Date: 2005-11-01 05:11 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] zoe-jayne.livejournal.com
Very nicely done, good voice(s).

I believe my favourite part is: The ghost of the old men’s sins haunted her, so why couldn’t Simon? River’s only friends for the last few years had been ghosts. For a brief moment, she thought it would be alright to have Simon and these strange new people haunt her. At least she would no longer be lonely.

Poor River.

*cuddles her*

Date: 2005-11-01 08:26 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] walkwithheroes.livejournal.com
Thank you very much. Poor River does need a good cuddle after everything shes been through. Glad you're doing the job. :)

Date: 2005-11-02 12:50 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] purpleskyfly.livejournal.com
Omg, I love you.

and not just because you posted on my Community.

*HUGS*

Date: 2005-11-02 12:51 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] purpleskyfly.livejournal.com
Okay, I read this s'morning and I thought I posted.

This is so good, Poor River, thinkin' she or her brother dead. I would freak out too!

Good, can't wait for more. MORE. :D

Date: 2005-11-02 01:05 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] walkwithheroes.livejournal.com
There is (sadly) no more to this story, but I am hoping to write more stories with River as the focus.

Date: 2005-11-02 01:04 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] walkwithheroes.livejournal.com
:) Why, thank you for the love. Hope you enjoyed the story.

Date: 2005-11-02 09:15 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] calijirl5150.livejournal.com
Very nice tye-in to BDM. Good insight to what RIver was thinkin while she was in the box.

Date: 2005-11-02 03:30 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] walkwithheroes.livejournal.com
Thank you very much, it was great fun and very interesting to write.

Date: 2005-11-05 02:50 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] fleshlycherry.livejournal.com
I've always wondered how aware River was while she was in that box. You've really tapped something interesting here. Good job.

Date: 2005-11-05 03:40 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] walkwithheroes.livejournal.com
What River was dreaming, hearing, seeing, or thinking in cryo was always something I wondered about too. Thanks a lot for the review.

Date: 2005-11-07 05:42 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] paperdollgirl.livejournal.com
Wow, wonderful story! I´m running the CSI Fanfiction Archive (http://nadine.fan-arts.net/lits) and was wondering if you would allow me to archive your story there. Thank you. :D

Date: 2005-11-07 06:36 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] walkwithheroes.livejournal.com
Thank you so much! I would be honored if you archived my story there. :) By the way, I love your icon. Where did you get it?

Date: 2005-11-07 06:47 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] paperdollgirl.livejournal.com
Thank you! Oh, I made it myself.

Date: 2005-11-07 08:23 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] paperdollgirl.livejournal.com
Thanks! Will add your story on the next update. If you ever write more please send it my way. :)

Date: 2005-11-07 09:51 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] walkwithheroes.livejournal.com
If you ever write more please send it my way. :)

I'll be sure to do that. :)

Date: 2006-03-10 02:09 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] fireshaper87.livejournal.com
can I snaggle? (with credit of course)

Date: 2006-03-11 03:09 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] paperdollgirl.livejournal.com
Sure you can snag. But I didn´t make this one *points at icon*, I made the one I used before. ^.^

Date: 2005-11-07 06:51 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] paperdollgirl.livejournal.com
Oh and btw what name do you want me to use.

Date: 2005-11-07 08:02 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] walkwithheroes.livejournal.com
You can use walkwithheroes, that would be fine.

Date: 2005-11-26 04:13 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] hermionesviolin.livejournal.com
Oh, wow, this is amazing. I read a lot of River's reactions as being reactions against what was done to her at the Academy (her aversion to needles, medications, hospital rooms, etc.) but to read Miranda into her girl-in-a-box awakening, wow... I hadn't thought much of her "They talk to me, they want me to... to talk..." line before, and I would have seen it as a holdover from the Academy, of the doctors pushing her further and further, but Miranda... wow.

Date: 2005-11-26 04:57 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] walkwithheroes.livejournal.com
Thank you for the great review!

but to read Miranda into her girl-in-a-box awakening, wow... I hadn't thought much of her "They talk to me, they want me to... to talk..." line before, and I would have seen it as a holdover from the Academy, of the doctors pushing her further and further, but Miranda... wow.

Since seeing the film, that line just seems to make perfect sense in terms of Miranda and everything that happened there. To me, that was what she was saying.

Date: 2005-11-26 05:05 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] hermionesviolin.livejournal.com
Yeah, given movie canon it does make perfect sense for that line to be referring to Miranda. Brilliant.

Date: 2005-11-26 07:09 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] walkwithheroes.livejournal.com
Thanks again. :)

Date: 2008-05-08 02:14 am (UTC)
got_swagger: (FF/S:  River Dances)
From: [personal profile] got_swagger
This is fantastic! This is a great take on River's first thoughts in Serenity, and I really enjoyed reading this!

Date: 2008-05-09 02:22 pm (UTC)
From: (Anonymous)
I'm not signed it, but this is the author:


thanks for reading. I really need to start writing in this fandom again.

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